Creative Writing

Henry Mince's eyes popped open as his father, Theodore, shouted for him to get out of bed. Henry sat up, groggy, dreaming it was morning and his mother had just come in to wake him. He opened his eyes, looked around the room and realized yes, he had been dreaming. She always had woken him softly and slowly, not with a shout, like his dad. He crept out of bed, his feet cold against the wood floor. He came out of his room just in time for his father to say a quick goodbye before he was out the door for work, leaving Henry to fend for himself until supper time.

Henry shuffled around the house, getting ready for the day. He walked to the bathroom for his morning shower, his feet creaking on the floorboards, the only noise in the house. He finished up in the bathroom, brushing his hair and teeth, and made way for the kitchen to have some breakfast. He was still so sleepy; he could almost close his eyes remembering when the house would be filled with the aroma of bacon on the skillet. He walked into the room, his mouth instantly beginning to salivate with the fond memory, only to open his eyes to an empty room. No bacon, no parents, just cold, hard cereal in a ceramic bowl for Henry this morning.

Henry stood there for a moment just staring at his balloon. Then his gaze slowly went towards the water. He watched it flow and knew that everything would be okay, someday. He remembered everything that the old man and Lucy had said to him today. They just might be right, he thought to himself.

"Hey Lucy, wait for me." Henry shouted as he took off running after his new friend.

October 27, 2009

核心痛点切入

"为什么你绞尽脑汁写的故事教授只给B？

Creative Writing 是什么？

不仅仅是写故事，而是让读者"看到水面下的隐含意义"，用细节、氛围、暗示来讲故事，而不是把所有都说清楚。

（例：不说'她悲伤'→ 写'她反复摩挲褪色的婚戒，咖啡凉透也没喝一口）

老师打分重点：

1. 主题深度：故事是否有余韵？
2. 细节刻画：有没有"用小见大"？
3. 叙事技巧：结构、视角、节奏有没有设计？
4. 语言表现：感官描写、隐喻象征是否精准到位？
5. 原创性：有没有个人风格，避免 AI 模板腔？

新手常见漏缺：

• 全文都在叙事，没挖"为什么觉得重要"
• 把所有意思都写明白，读不出意义
• 只描环境、不刻画人物内心或变化

用冰山理论写Creative Writing的技巧：

1. 写表象细节（动作、环境）
2. 隐含核心意图（不直接点情绪）
3. 利用留白激发读者想象
4. 回头校稿：删掉冗余解释，让"水下意思"自己浮现

建议写作节奏：

• 第1天：构思冲突、关键场景、情绪基调
• 第2天：写出短小片段，专注"动 + 环"细节
• 第3天：删"他很害怕""她很伤心"那种解释型句子
• 第4天：请别人读读，他们能否看出"水下意思"？没看出来再继续调

关键词收藏：

Iceberg Theory / Show, don't tell / Sensory detail / Subtext / Ambiguity

下期我们继续了解Critical Journal 写作全指南。

我们特别精选了一篇高分 Creative Writing 范文 —— 《Floating Away》，由导师亲笔撰写，并配套逐段深度点评，带你一次吃透以下关键能力：

1. 主题深度：如何写出余韵，不显得内容寡淡
2. 细节刻画：如何"用小见大"
3. 叙事技巧：结构·视角·节奏全链路拆解
4. 语言表现：感官描写 & 隐喻象征精准定位
5. 原创性：写出个人声线，拒绝 AI 模板腔

适合人群：

• 想拿高分但总被批"故事直白、AI 味浓"的创作者
• 想把"情感向"题材写得含而不露、余味悠长的同学
• 想系统升级短篇叙事结构与象征写法的进阶写作者

收藏这一份《Floating Away》范文＋"拆机式"点评，把它当作你的Creative Writing跳板——跟着老师的批注边读边改，你的下一篇故事就能自带余韵、稳站高分区。